Monday, 23 May 2016

My Short Story

For this piece of writing I have focussing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to..

  • use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
  • use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8)

The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal

My story Peer Pressure

My hands felt clammy with sweat. I was really nervous about this whole high school thing. I watched every high school clique there was I don’t know if that made me prepared or not .


The voice startled me I \ around ], there was an average height girl, black hair with blue highlights. She had her skirt hitched so it made even the uniform look cool.

“Sarah?” I say more as a question.

She Gnawed on her her gum thoughtfully ”I’m harmony, I know sucky name but I didn’t choose it” Harmony says.

I felt this was the end of our conversation so I  take off towards Block E.

“Oi sarah wanna ditch with me, Y'know always good on the first day cause they never suspect a thing” Harmony says for of a command then a question.

I didn’t really want to miss the my first class, did I? BUt I didn’t want to disappoint harmony.

I surprised myself how casual I sounded”

“Let's do this”

I nod in answer.

“ We’ll go down to the dairy and get some chocolate or something”Harmony says.

“I don’t have any money” I say nervously

“You don’t need no money” she says with a high pitched ;laugh.


“No. were going to steal stuff” Harmony says in duh tone.

Butterflies swarm in my stomach , no way was me sarah connolly going to do this. I was always the good girl with perfect grades.  Maybe it was time for a change.

Harmony and I had now arrived at the dairy and my nerves were worse than ever.

“ trust me you won’t get caught I’ve done this a million times before”
I gulp nervously act cool,act cool. I don’t want to act like a total whimp.

“I’ll show  you what I can do” Harmony says before stepping into the dairy .

I waited what felt like hours but really was only five minutes.Harmony chucks me a block of chocolate.

“You’re turn”

I nod before  I swiel into the dairy. The lady at the counter bowed over counting money. The perfect opportunity .

I heads towards the chocolate stall  and grab a twix twisting it around my thumb was I really gonna do this. My thoughts jitter from when I won the spelling bee to when I meet harmony.
This wasn’t the right choice. I drop the chocolate and go up yo the counter.

“ Can I report shoplifting”

Wednesday, 18 May 2016

Must do- librarian

Yesterday Jessica and I went down to the juniors to read to them. We collected some bean bags and went to find some books to read to them. After we headed down to the juniors deck and went looking for some kids it was a bit hard because everyone seemed to want to skip and do other stuff and not read. We finally found two kids really wanting to read. We read nearly a whole Barbie box to them! They seemed to really enjoy it and so did I :) :)

The leadership trait I showed was resilience because it was very hard to find kids to read too.

Get involved- Merit badge

Today it was oaklands bake-sale so me and the rest of the leaders had to help out first we had to set up and get the food and tables  ready. After people started coming and it was big rush trying to figure out prices and serving people. I really enjoyed selling to people, knowing when to put the price down and figuring out how to get stuff sold.
The leadership trait I showed was resilient  cause I had to work out what to do in hard solutions fast.

Monday, 2 May 2016

I can describe the structure of a Short Story

 I can describe the structure of a Short Story

Something I have learned about the structure of short stories that it mostly the same to but get straight to the main point

After reading some short stories two things I will remember when I write my own short story are to not to get to into the details and get to the main problem and express different feeling

Sunday, 1 May 2016

Must do- Leadership meeting

Today Mr Ladbrook for our leadership meeting  showed us a graph of what people were doing in blog posts and showed us how we were doing. Turns out most of us our doing pretty well. we  also talked about what was going on around the school eg: tabloid sports ect:  we talked about this for a few minutes and then  after we had time to do blog posts which is what I'm doing right now.
The leadership trait I showed was active thinking was I had to figure how long it would take to get my badge.